How is my SECOND rap "Demented" (rate it 1-10 and tell me whats good/bad)? its to Eminem's "Demon Inside" beat?

i thinks its pretty good the lyrics are amazing but it sounds like your trying to keep a fast pace in your song and seems like you stumble. try and rap to the beat in the background it keeps the song smooth and will sound awesome when its on a beat also try and have a break or a courus